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Dead Lines

13 Dec

 

This poem could come in the dreaded category of abstract. Do reading poems that make little sense frighten you? Well go ahead  and of course I’ll explain.

 

                  Buddha Rocks Project hosted by Evelyn

The end does not justify

The biscuit crumbs and late nights when saucers

Or  eyes (can not tell) pull meanings out of twenty six,

Just that many, permutations, combinations, bones are pulled out of the earth

And put together by jigsaw people who know the blade and the jaw, the foot and the fall,

Cities rise from under the earth, how many graves, can you count?

 

This poem is about working on a deadline when suddenly….. One thing all readers of poems must be prepared for is to read the entire poem through even if not a single word registers. Usually the poet knows what he or she is trying to say, and  readers make those poems live and breathe as it is their imaginations that play the stage. I often like to read poems that I find rather tedious for the simple reason that once you get at even a part of its meaning, you feel warm inside.

Have you ever tried it?

© neelthemuse,2011

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Posted by on December 13, 2011 in Day to day

 

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20 responses to “Dead Lines

  1. yoga-adan

    December 13, 2011 at 10:56 am

    “One thing all readers of poems must be prepared for is to read the entire poem through even if not a single word registers” –

    there’s a power and a ryhthm in this poem not visible unless i do the above

    and yes, i didn’t “get” it completely first read through, but boy, did i feel a groundswell!

    tried to pull “the” line when that happened for me, and couldn’t, too cohesive! but of many line portions i liked, esp liked the sequence, “Cities rise from under the earth, how many graves”

    also really like your added commentary, pre and post-poem 😉

    thanks!

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  2. yoga-adan

    December 13, 2011 at 11:03 am

    ps, neel, you should consider adding wp’s other social media buttons, esp reddit, digg, and stumbleupon – i’ve posted a link to this post on some of these, but easier for folk to share if their buttons are already on your post

    but just an idea of course 😉 i’ve only recently made those particular social media buttons visible on mine; thanks!

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  3. neelthemuse

    December 13, 2011 at 11:28 am

    I’m glad you liked the commentary Adan….I think it’s in the explanation that the beauty of poetry lies.

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  4. neelthemuse

    December 13, 2011 at 11:29 am

    Wow Adan I have so much to learn! Thank you ever so much for giving me that info….will have to revamp the website soon:) Once again, your encouragement means much!!!!!

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  5. simon7banks

    December 13, 2011 at 11:31 am

    I’ll need to return to this to develop my reaction – but I like the sound of the words: “pulled out of the earth/ by jigsaw people who know the blade and the jaw, the foot and the fall…” – and that bit makes perfect sense to me.

    I fully agree about reading the poem through even if you’re puzzled by it. That would be my advice to someone who can’t understand one of my poems – don’t get hung up on the meaning, then, read it, listen to it, and maybe some meaning will seep through. That said, some of my poems I thought were impossibly obscure get published and people like them without asking me what the hell they’re about!

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  6. yoga-adan

    December 13, 2011 at 11:40 am

    know how you feel 😉 sometimes i think i’m sliding down a sticky superslide that everyone else has already been down before it got sticky!

    in wp, if you go into your settings (on your left sidebar of things you can do on your site if it’s like mine) then to sharing, there you can make visible all kinds of social media sharing buttons

    for a long time, i didn’t want to show many cause i simply didn’t use them, wasn’t familiar with them, so didn’t think it was worth it – wrong 😉

    best wishes!

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  7. Eric

    December 13, 2011 at 12:29 pm

    I like how you’ve shown us our place in line here. Some day those who dig up bones will become the bones themselves, and on and on. It’s the way of things.

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  8. neelthemuse

    December 13, 2011 at 12:41 pm

    The reason I mentioned obscurity was because of how much I love Eliot’s Wasteland….if it wasn’t for my professor, I would never have loved modernist poetry. I know it is called high brow and there is even an argument that modernist poetry killed the interest that people had in poetry. If you do understand Eliot though, it opens your mind. Thank you for your thought provoking response Simon….

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  9. neelthemuse

    December 13, 2011 at 12:42 pm

    Thank you Eric….just the picture you had for the sentiment in the poem!

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  10. yoga-adan

    December 13, 2011 at 12:55 pm

    just had to say your comment made me outright smile, first big smile of the day 😉 thank you much!

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  11. Evelyn

    December 13, 2011 at 1:06 pm

    “And put together by jigsaw people who know the blade and the jaw, the foot and the fall”
    great line!
    Im so happy you joined again!

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  12. neelthemuse

    December 13, 2011 at 3:11 pm

    Glad to be aboard Evelyn!

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  13. Caddo Veil

    December 13, 2011 at 4:41 pm

    I So agree–and I’m finding that readers often see my poems completely differently from how I meant/wrote them–but it’s fascinating! Unless it’s singularly crucial to me, I don’t “correct” their interpretation–because if I’ve given them a gift, they should be able to use/enjoy it how they will, no? Thank you, thank you for your work here–I do benefit immensely. God bless you!

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  14. brian miller

    December 13, 2011 at 5:13 pm

    nice..i agree as well…poets dont usually take the direct route…even when they seem to…this is about that…and very nice verse

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  15. granbee

    December 13, 2011 at 10:35 pm

    The “26” was the clue for me: having wrestled with those same pesky 26 many a night, I was able to enjoy this poem on first reading. That with which one has wrestled can never be put back into the cage marked “abstract”.

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  16. neelthemuse

    December 14, 2011 at 4:43 am

    Glad that poetry benefits you…it’s so heartening to hear!Thank you Caddo!

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  17. neelthemuse

    December 14, 2011 at 4:44 am

    The beauty of indirectness…..I read a great piece just now about why obscurity is part of poetspeak. Thank you Brian.

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  18. neelthemuse

    December 14, 2011 at 4:46 am

    Glad you took a cue from the clue granbee. You are absolutely right about how the abstract disappears with understanding…thank you for sharing your thoughts on this!

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  19. Caddo Veil

    December 19, 2011 at 1:40 am

    Neel–my trivial curiosity compels me to ask how you have time to moderate every comment, even from folks you “know”?

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  20. neelthemuse

    December 19, 2011 at 3:42 am

    Guess that’s how ‘blogships’ are made:) Thanks Caddo and God bless!

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