Last Dance

14 Feb

Have you ever wondered about the tapestry of images that a peaceful death can evoke? When I saw this picture

Sunday Picture Press

I thought about the sweetness of one’s last moments. It is a time of saturation when all of life’s characters do the last dance right before your eyes.


Once upon a time- it comes to me now in a rush

It isn’t so bad to be leaving. I know what you think.

Tears well up in your eyes when you see I have packed.

Journeys! what marks they make on memory. It isn’t that way at all

The sea swell in your throat is for you. Not me. I see that now, so clearly


As I lie down- there is a rush with the past, time ticks again and I see us dance

Yesterday, a song? replayed.  Thoughts suspended- the he and the she becoming

That elusive thing- the Self? The One? The only?


Enacts once more and in my mind two shadows kiss.

I will not share this joy with you- My mystery,  My going- see my pallor

In fear.  In wonder.


© neelthemuse, 2012



Posted by on February 14, 2012 in Death, Love, Prompts


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25 responses to “Last Dance

  1. simon7banks

    February 14, 2012 at 10:21 am

    Excellent – I loved this.


  2. granbee

    February 14, 2012 at 6:29 pm

    The one left behind DOES have the right to mourn. The one leaving does have the right to sweet memories, held close in the heart, not shared. But somewhere in between the two, both must learn to love outwardly in non-romantic ways in order to truly stay alive. Before that happens–only pallor in fearfulness.


  3. Betty Hayes Albright

    February 14, 2012 at 7:26 pm

    This poem was evocative for me – the memories, the final goodbyes, the little deaths and the big deaths, the literal and the metaphorical deaths. Very nicely written, Neel – I felt it in many layers.


  4. Indigo Spider

    February 15, 2012 at 12:18 am

    That is very truthful — “The sea swell in your throat is for you. Not me.” Amazing piece, sad yet somehow, not.


  5. Caddo Veil

    February 15, 2012 at 1:03 am

    You so often leave me “wordless”–this is one a them days. Happy V’ Day to you and the spouse~~


  6. c . Grace Whiting

    February 15, 2012 at 2:16 am

    evocative splendor
    words waltz
    words jig
    memories flit
    yet linger


  7. neelthemuse

    February 15, 2012 at 4:08 am

    Lovely words Grace…


  8. neelthemuse

    February 15, 2012 at 4:12 am

    Thank you Caddo:) Could you visit my twitter page? I’ll get back to you on why…..


  9. neelthemuse

    February 15, 2012 at 4:12 am

    Thank you Indigo….loved your challenge:)


  10. neelthemuse

    February 15, 2012 at 4:13 am

    Means a lot to me Betty. Thanks!


  11. neelthemuse

    February 15, 2012 at 4:14 am

    Yes granbee, for a moment in the poem I saw dying as something different from what it conventionally is seen as….


  12. neelthemuse

    February 15, 2012 at 4:14 am

    Thank you Simon!


  13. Kourtney Heintz

    February 18, 2012 at 12:32 am

    Wow loved the image and the imagery your words evoked. 🙂


  14. neelthemuse

    February 20, 2012 at 3:30 am

    Thank you Kourtney!


  15. MyWordsWhisper

    February 20, 2012 at 3:38 pm

    This is such a beautiful piece, poignant and truthful. I will copy this piece and reread it often, if that is alright with you.


  16. loiswstern

    February 21, 2012 at 2:13 am

    Quite a powerful poem. And beautifully expressed. Thanks for sharing!


  17. neelthemuse

    February 21, 2012 at 11:39 am

    I’m so glad you enjoyed it enough to think of coming back to the piece again:)


  18. leamuse

    February 21, 2012 at 5:35 pm

    Beautiful and sad. I really enjoyed it.

    Thanks for visiting my blog.


  19. neelthemuse

    February 23, 2012 at 4:15 pm



  20. Claire 'Word by Word'

    March 9, 2012 at 8:24 am

    Beautiful perspective, that awareness that comes with nearing the end and letting go.


  21. neelthemuse

    March 9, 2012 at 9:13 am

    Thank you!


  22. neelthemuse

    March 9, 2012 at 9:14 am

    Came from a sad place….


  23. grace whiting

    March 14, 2012 at 1:58 am

    a spring day almost
    winter gone almost

    in this part of the world

    hope the world is good
    where you may be

    keep writing
    keep posting

    your words wing
    across the web

    many thanks Grace


  24. neelthemuse

    March 14, 2012 at 2:14 am

    Thank you Grace for your beautiful words….hope you stop by again!



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