Severe Feminist

08 Mar

Every woman has a love-hate relationship with the opposite gender. Likewise for men. This poem is about a severely feminist thought, a moment in time when a woman is angry with her male counterpart. She hears her male narrator speak- or puts words into his mouth. Remember, she is a very very biased feminist and doesn’t like this man very much.


Come here woman

Give me your pittens

Let me drink and make a din

With coconut trees around me to piss on

And night the colour of dreams.


What? You won’t give. Then here’s a slap on one cheek!

Now show the other. Nicey does it.

There. Another. You bleed so easily and all those sobs

Mess up your house dress, the one better- off.


Get up will you? Wash yourself. A mess you are.

That’s it, get me my umbrella, it rains outside and the approach road

Will flood. Liquor calls me. That’s the spirit, wipe and clean, go and bathe,

Tidy the room, pick up the pieces, mend! I want it spic and span when I return

With the sea sway in my limbs and  the dream coated tongue.


Stop crying! Fools the feminine. Weeping when promises lie in glass.

If only figures did not hold the moon, the lunatic swell of expectation,

If only you were mannequins…but isn’t that what you are already?

Your breasts are firm like rock, I stroke them and rise before I leave.


Goodnight wife, goodnight woman, goodnight girl, my slut, my slave.


© neelthemuse, 2012


Posted by on March 8, 2012 in Day to day


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10 responses to “Severe Feminist

  1. granbee

    March 8, 2012 at 11:53 pm

    Unfortunately, a strict feminist views all males, all husbands, in this light! You have done a very masterful job of poetically expressing this, with just the right lingo and rhythms!


  2. Vanshja Gairola

    March 9, 2012 at 4:09 am

    A good and dark one indeed!! 🙂


  3. neelthemuse

    March 9, 2012 at 9:14 am

    Thank you for your kindness!


  4. neelthemuse

    March 9, 2012 at 9:15 am

    Absolutely granbee…anything in excess is undesirable…


  5. brian miller

    March 10, 2012 at 5:07 am

    any thought process taken to the extreme is surely harmful…


  6. Claudia

    March 10, 2012 at 12:03 pm

    heck…she should spit him in the face and throw him out…dang…strong write about a damn sad topic


  7. neelthemuse

    March 11, 2012 at 4:33 pm

    Absolutely Brian!


  8. neelthemuse

    March 11, 2012 at 4:35 pm

    Thank you Claudia for liking the power element…


  9. Claire 'Word by Word'

    December 31, 2012 at 7:50 am

    So sad, even the voice doesn’t belong to her, maybe there is hope and opportunity in that.



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